I feel like my writing improved most because of all the critiques and drafts i did. My first draft is totally different from my second draft because of day when we sat and broke each and every sentence down. In these critiques we cut paragraphs that were not needed so the overall photo essay could flow better. My writing defiantly comes out better when i go through it numerous times to revise each and every sentence. I also learned how each individual sentence should be structured, like how the action word should come before the noun in beginning of a sentence. Learning how to structure writing well is important because it will make it sound better and more professional which may come in hand later on in life.
I learned alot about how to better enhance my photos on photo shop. Before this project i had never used indesign. I learned a lot about the correct way to layout a magazine by either using one pika to space your pictures and captions or bleeding off the page. Next year i plan on taking photography to a whole level whether it be displaying galleries or incorporating something into my senior project. This project along with my H2O project got me really interested in photography and hopefully this is just a start to a great hobby that will lead to many sucessful projects in the future.
Sunday, May 31, 2009
Wednesday, May 27, 2009
Magazine Reflection Part 2
1. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why?
I feel like my writing improved most because of all the critiques and drafts i did. My first draft is totally different from my second draft because of day when we sat and broke each and every sentence down. In these critiques we cut paragraphs that were not needed so the overall photo essay could flow better. I also learned alot on how each individual sentence should be structured, like how the action word should come before the noun.
2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?
I think that my my writing can improve by limiting use of the "ings". A problem that i have is not using the present tend and not getting strait to the point. If i improve on these tactics then i think my writing will become better.
3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.
BEFORE
With Project Wildlife receiving over 300 different species of birds, baby season (spring and summer) seems to have that bulk of the intake. The most common species of bird I’ve seen throughout my experience are pigeons and doves. When baby birds like this pigeon come in no more then a couple weeks old, the volunteers then step in to help tube feed and give it the necessities he or she needs to then be raised here, hopefully to soon be released back into the wild. Baby season has a process of getting ready for by setting up numerous cages and incubators, taking on more volunteers, and receiving more supplies. This is because there is no specific planned day baby birds start arriving; they usually are brought in by the public unexpectedly and frequently. Here at the care center we set up rows of cages with newspaper already laid down inside of them to be prepared for the unexpected.
AFTER
Project Wildlife is at its busiest during spring and summer, also known as baby season, when we handle over three hundred different species of birds. When baby birds come in just a couple weeks old, volunteers get right to work and this is not an easy task. To get ready for baby season, we set up numerous cages and incubators, take on more volunteers, and receive more supplies. At the care center we set up rows of cages with newspaper already laid inside of them so we are prepared for the unexpected. Baby birds start arriving in the spring, and they join opossums, ducks, and rabbits together at the care center.
as you can see the before has alot of those "ings" and in the after i eliminated most of those to make things simpler and strait to the point. Like i said before i also cut stuff that wasnt useful and that didnt do anything for my writing.
4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
*Action words come before the nouns!
*Cut the "ings"
*Get strait to the point
I feel like my writing improved most because of all the critiques and drafts i did. My first draft is totally different from my second draft because of day when we sat and broke each and every sentence down. In these critiques we cut paragraphs that were not needed so the overall photo essay could flow better. I also learned alot on how each individual sentence should be structured, like how the action word should come before the noun.
2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?
I think that my my writing can improve by limiting use of the "ings". A problem that i have is not using the present tend and not getting strait to the point. If i improve on these tactics then i think my writing will become better.
3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.
BEFORE
With Project Wildlife receiving over 300 different species of birds, baby season (spring and summer) seems to have that bulk of the intake. The most common species of bird I’ve seen throughout my experience are pigeons and doves. When baby birds like this pigeon come in no more then a couple weeks old, the volunteers then step in to help tube feed and give it the necessities he or she needs to then be raised here, hopefully to soon be released back into the wild. Baby season has a process of getting ready for by setting up numerous cages and incubators, taking on more volunteers, and receiving more supplies. This is because there is no specific planned day baby birds start arriving; they usually are brought in by the public unexpectedly and frequently. Here at the care center we set up rows of cages with newspaper already laid down inside of them to be prepared for the unexpected.
AFTER
Project Wildlife is at its busiest during spring and summer, also known as baby season, when we handle over three hundred different species of birds. When baby birds come in just a couple weeks old, volunteers get right to work and this is not an easy task. To get ready for baby season, we set up numerous cages and incubators, take on more volunteers, and receive more supplies. At the care center we set up rows of cages with newspaper already laid inside of them so we are prepared for the unexpected. Baby birds start arriving in the spring, and they join opossums, ducks, and rabbits together at the care center.
as you can see the before has alot of those "ings" and in the after i eliminated most of those to make things simpler and strait to the point. Like i said before i also cut stuff that wasnt useful and that didnt do anything for my writing.
4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
*Action words come before the nouns!
*Cut the "ings"
*Get strait to the point
Tuesday, May 19, 2009
Magazine Reflection
1. What went well during the process of making this magazine was that i already had my photo essay and picture in hand so basically all i had to do was revise what i already had. I am really proud of my photography and my writing i think it turned out well. Doing a photo essay seemed like the right choice for me to enter into the magazine.
2. One challenge i faced throughout my drafts was figuring out what to cut and how to reword sentences. At first i didn't want to get rid of sections in my photo essay but when i did, it flowed much easier and was overall better to understand. Going through all the critiques was an overwhelming process but it helped so much.
3. I thought the magazines that we looked at (New Yorker and etc.) were very helped because we got to look at their layouts and apply some of their techniques to ours. It was a good example of how a magazine should look along with an example of what looks good.
2. One challenge i faced throughout my drafts was figuring out what to cut and how to reword sentences. At first i didn't want to get rid of sections in my photo essay but when i did, it flowed much easier and was overall better to understand. Going through all the critiques was an overwhelming process but it helped so much.
3. I thought the magazines that we looked at (New Yorker and etc.) were very helped because we got to look at their layouts and apply some of their techniques to ours. It was a good example of how a magazine should look along with an example of what looks good.
Tuesday, April 21, 2009
Obama and Socialism
1. No, i don't think that the label socialism is the right way to describe his polices or proposals. In the article on "Why Obama's socialism matters" the author describes how "If it were up to me to attach labels to modern political ideologies, I would choose the terms "Individualism" and "Statism." I agree with this statement. He might have been a socialist but i wouldn't label his polices or proposals as "socialism."
2. I dont think Obama's policys or proposals have had historic precedents in the past. Other then him giving all of these bailouts and jumping in to save the economy, i can't think of any connections he relates too.
2. I dont think Obama's policys or proposals have had historic precedents in the past. Other then him giving all of these bailouts and jumping in to save the economy, i can't think of any connections he relates too.
Thursday, March 26, 2009
Photo Essay
With Project Wildlife receiving over 300 different species of birds, baby season (spring and summer) seems to have that bulk of the intake. The most common species of bird I’ve seen throughout my experience are pigeons and doves. When baby birds like this pigeon come in no more then a couple weeks old, the volunteers then step in to help tube feed and give it the necessities he or she needs to then be raised here, hopefully to soon be released back into the wild. Baby season has a process of getting ready for by setting up numerous cages and incubators, taking on more volunteers, and receiving more supplies. This is because there is no specific planned day baby birds start arriving; they usually are brought in by the public unexpectedly and frequently. Here at the care center we set up rows of cages with newspaper already laid down inside of them to be prepared for the unexpected.
Rabbits or the Desert cottontail are a common mammal that arrives at the care center. Throughout my internship I am currently creating a rabbit protocol for 2009. This protocol documents how many rabbits end up expired or euthanized, along with how many get released back into the wild or go to home care. Any cottontail that comes in under 35 grams has to be automatically euthanized based on past protocols where rabbits under that weight rarely survived. Project Wildlife is trying to figure out what more they can do to increase the survival rate of these animals. A lot of the desert cottontails that come in have been fatality injured by cats or dogs. In some cases when a mother rabbit leaves her nest to go find food for the day, people pick up the babies not realizing the mother has only left temporarily. Project Wildlife tries to do whatever possible to care for these sensitive mammals.
Project Wildlife gets a handful of raptors (birds of prey) in as well. Red Shoulder hawks along with Red Tail hawks are a typical species of bird taken in. One experience I encountered during my internship involved giving the red tail hawk (above) fluids because he was partially dehydrated. When animals are under stress or in shock they tend to not eat or drink. The staff would then tube feed or hydrate the animal by administering fluids. Keeping noise levels down and limiting “peaking” or visiting in on an animal helps eliminate some of that stress. Project Wildlife is currently trying to set up an (intensive care unit) ICU medical room. This room would be designed for raptors to be away from people and stress the main room displays. Once these raptors are ready to be released back into the wild, they are taken back to the same zip code they were originally from because it is the familiar area they once lived.
While Project Wildlife is generally open to the public, there is a process for taking in animals 24 hours a day. Even when project wildlife is closed there is a drop off station where you can take the wildlife to. This station is equipped with heating pads, crates, and blankets until they reopen again at 8:00 AM. Every animal that we receive gets a special card that displays information where they were found, their species type, and other examination notes. This helps the staff and volunteers identify each animal and what specific needs are required for their care. We use a computer system called ARK that stores the information data from these cards into numerous files. ARK requires the species to be in Latin and can pull up many species at a time creating lists. This is very helpful when it comes to collecting data and gathering information for protocols.
“Project Wildlife is all donation funded, we do receive a few grants, but don’t receive any federal or state funding, its all from private donors and citizens” replied Marci Danielson the registered veterinary technician at Project Wildlife. Since Project Wildlife is a non-profit organization, most of the supplies like medicine, food, and medical supplies are donated from vet offices and the public. The private donors or grants project wildlife receives are usually from small offices or stores. In some cases they even receive grants from the public. This non-profit organization is permitted by the California fish and game, U.S fish and wildlife, and the U.S departments of agriculture to be able to handle and care for these wild animals. Without these special permits it is illegal to rehabilitate or care for any type of wildlife. Learn more about Project Wildlife by going to http://projectwildlife.org/ to see what you can do to help the wildlife of
Tuesday, March 24, 2009
Magazinee!
1. What article(s) would you like to write for the magazine? What photography could you contribute? Art? List three different ideas for your major contribution.
-I could contribute my photography because i have alot of pictures that i did not use in my photo essay that would look nice in the magazine. My main contribution would be my photo essay because its a good example of an internship that works with animals and i know some sophmores would be interested in an internship like that, maybe even my photo essay along with an album like i did with my H20 project.
2. Suggest at least one (or more) possible title for the magazine. This could be a title with or without a subtitle. For example, I work for UnBoxed: a Journal of Adult Learning in Schools.
Internships: learning to grow in the real world
3. Suggest a topic for an article that you were personally like to read in a magazine inspired by the internship semester.
-I would likw to read about different students internships and what experiences and projects they did.
-I could contribute my photography because i have alot of pictures that i did not use in my photo essay that would look nice in the magazine. My main contribution would be my photo essay because its a good example of an internship that works with animals and i know some sophmores would be interested in an internship like that, maybe even my photo essay along with an album like i did with my H20 project.
2. Suggest at least one (or more) possible title for the magazine. This could be a title with or without a subtitle. For example, I work for UnBoxed: a Journal of Adult Learning in Schools.
Internships: learning to grow in the real world
3. Suggest a topic for an article that you were personally like to read in a magazine inspired by the internship semester.
-I would likw to read about different students internships and what experiences and projects they did.
Tuesday, March 17, 2009
Immersion Journal
Social welfare along with profit and advertising are all important aspects to Project Wildlife. Since project wildlife is a non-profit organization their profit is all relied on public donations and grants. They are not funded by the government or state to help run this organization. Social welfare takes place because project wildlife rehabs and takes care of sick and injured animals. They are here and open to the public to help these animals to better the environment. Advertising helps promote most businesses but for project wildlife it helps promote donations to keep the organization running. When we advertise for the care center we usually explain what our organization does and encourage people to donate and continue bringing their animals here and since we all are volunteer run, we also notify them about our volunteer program and seasons when we need the most help. Advertising, social welfare, and profits(donations/grants) has got us to be the well know organization we are today.
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